Tuesday, November 25, 2008

after reading Keats' Ode on Indolence

skin and shirts first melt
and then seep through couch fibers,
that mesh of morphine

(I can't decide whether I want to use "seep" or "drip"...)

2 comments:

Anonymous said...

I like seep because it's more continuous... drips are separated. Depends on the effect you're going for.

Renata said...

seep. It's got some sort of alliteration thing going on with it, which is awesome. It's cool.